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Dec
18,
2013
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Redflags:
Suggestions:
- Page 9- "A basket of relevant indicators" sounds too informal. Simply say "and relavant indicators?"
Recommendations:
- Page 2, Paragraph 1 of the Overview repeats on Page 9, Paragraph 1 of the Introduction. Condense and reorder.
Changes:
- Pg 4, Point 1 of Overview-- Enabling Policies
- change develop to developed
- Work Group 1-- Title inconsistent. Use "&" or "And."
- Pg 9 Thematic Work Groups
- Work Group 1-- Title inconsistent. Use "&" or "And."
- Pg 15, last paragraph, second line--Change 'form' to 'from'
- pg 15, last paragraph, third line- 'exclusion' or 'inclusion?'
Issues:
- Pg 7 Will the page read "Deliberately Left Blank" or describe the following section in some manner?
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